I just did like everything and then I press post comment, its not working so I all of my comments deleted, let's start again omg <3 so cool I love it, you told me it wasn't good, true it's not good but it's FABULOUS
Content: It was really great, the topic was really clear. You guys really focused on the topic and make it clear to listen and get what are you trying to sell. At first, I was like what's Boombox, and then the commercial explain everything. The commercial is not too short or long, its perfect timing, you guys included everything that you needed too. Your audiences are band player, drummer...so the instruments' sound effects were like awesome; it fits perfectly well with your topic and audience. At the end, where you introduce Boombox, you used Echo-ing effect which is really great because it emphasized Boombox and make the clients focus more on what are you selling. Because the clients need to know what are you selling and where do you sell it, so they can buy it.
Delivery: The narrations and the conversations are really smooth and well practiced. The voices work really well together, so it created good transitions. There were no background noises, which were great and make it clearer to listen. The voices were so emotional and expressive, that it so easy to visualize the situations. It was so descriptive that you guys bring me to the situation; I could almost feel like I’m standing there and listen to your conversations. Except for Nick's voice, his voice doesn't show any emotions or expressions, he was speaking like in a straight line, where the tones stay the same, which might make it not interesting. Also, some parts that Sarah said weren’t clear enough, but it’s not really a big deal. Your grammar was great, also, the voices flows really well, which makes it very natural.
Music: The music option was really good; it suits really well with the situations. Like when the guys found the new instruments, you played " It's on”, which shows that they have found the instruments that they needed, so that they're playing awesome right now.
Technical production: As I mentioned the transitions were really great, and the voices' volume was equal, not to loud or low. I’m like how did you guys do that, that's like amazing, everyone have their own voices, and guys are making it work so well together. You guys did an amazing job on this; the commercial is not too long or too short, its perfect timing.
OMG, I just love it so much, it's just so AMAZING, if you guys were really selling Boombox, I will be buying it.
Content: You guys did a very very good jobs. I like this commercial the most. The time was very perfect, 2 minutes and you guys could put all the things that you guys needed, it was just so amazing. The commercial shows who are the audiences and where people can contact if they want to buy Boombox. You guys really focus on the thing that you want to sell.
Delivery: The voices of the actors are really clearly, there were some soft music while the actors were talking, it made the audiences like the thing that you want to sell. The voices were very emotional, the actors show very clear when they angry or they feel satisfy. I like Henry's voice the most because he shows his emotion very clear. The grammar was very good too.
Music: The music you guys chose very good in every situations. After they bought a new instruments, they played very good which makes the audiences feel excited about it.
Technical: The volume was always equal, and it made me feel excited when I listen to the commercial. The time was perfect.
I love yours commercial, it was so good. this is the best commercial that I've ever heard.
Content: I think you guys did a good job. It's a little long, which will make the audince kin of bored, but it's not too long that would drive the audience nuts. Your audience are teenagers and music fan liek you said, was clearly show on your commercial, like when Henry said he had a show on weekend and he need a new drum. Your sound effects were great, that is what I like most about your commercial, you put the echoing sound at the end of the commercial which makes the commercial more interesting.
Delivery: I think your voices sound very clearly, especially Henry and Sarah's voice. Henry voice sound like he use some kind of very good technology, because his voice is the clearest of all. I have nothing to say to your grammar, it's perfect. You did a really great job on expressing feelings, again, Henry did a great job on this, he felt very excited when he saw the new drums, it's very good.
Music: Your background music fits with the situation, like when Henry saw the new drum, the music is excited.
Technical: You guys don't have noisy, dead space, it's good. You guys keep the sound equal, not sometimes very high, sometimes low. You guys did a great job on this.
If I could grade you out of 10 points, I would grade you guys 8.5/10.
I love your project and the way you guys did it was very cool. The sound was awesome and funny running order. But I think you should make it shorter but still keep the special of it stay the same. - Content: I think it a very creative project which you guys use many hilarious vocabulary words to make it more interesting. Also it includes as much as information for the audience to understand what it is about. When I watched it I understand right away and it is a good thing that the audiences really understand it. - Delivery: I love the way you guys delivered the idea to the audience by making sound and clear information. Also with a good grammar and easy to listen to, it also helps your project more successful. - Music Enhancements: About the music I think you guys but them in a good order but the quality of it should be clearer. Somehow when I heard it there was too many different music that make me very confuse and mess up. That is just some suggestion but still yours are awesome. - Technical Production: The transitions or your music and your voice are really smooth. The volume and the sound effects are balance. As I said it was a little bit long but the sounds are still perfect. I think yours are already cool and interesting. Yours are one of mine favorite and just a little suggestion as I said keep it shorter but don’t change anything else.
CONTENT I thought the topic was straght forward and clear. It's about a music instrument store kinda thing. And the audience you're presenting it to is very easy to recognize; teenagers and music fans. Even if you didn't tell me, I would know. The title Boombox Everywhere, umm, the Everywhere makes it sound not as good. So maybe if you thought of another word it would sound better. Otherwize I understood the topic from the beginning and the picture really helped :)
DELIVERY The way you delivered your lines help make the content clear. It was smooth, and the volume of each person was the same, which made is sound professional. You could've put more emotion into it though. Some people's lines, like Nick's & Sarah's were very plain & vague. It needed to sound lively. I know acting isn't a major part of commercials, but it wouldn't hurt to add a little hollywood into it :)
MUSIC The music you chose, for example one I recognized; Better Than Revenge, fit the situation well because the audience is for teenagers. Teenagers listen to modern music, and that's what keeps the commercial so lively, the rock music. I like how you chose songs that included a variety of instruments, which widens the range of instruments sold at the shop. That would make the customers want to buy it. But I think there was one song, something soft and sweet wouldn't fit this commercial very well. SO maybe a change in that? (:
TECHNICAL PRODUCTION The time was a little too long, but if it had a little more life in it then it would be worth it. Stil commercials aren't supposed to be long. I thought the volume was the same the whole way through for the voices, like I said, it made your commercial sound professional.
Woww, I..what's the word?..LOVE! your commercial *wink wink*
Content: you guys really stayed focus on the topic. I can already tell from the beginning that your group did a lot of editing and also adding sound effects to your audio. Amazing!
Delivery: It has a great delivery of conversational style. You spoke clearly and emotionally. I like that. I also like how Henry talks like a cool dude. Oh, perfect grammar also!
Technical Production: The equal volume of voice enhanced your presentation. But, I think your podcast was a little bit too long for a commercial, but it's very good so far!
Effectiveness: Seriously, if you guys were really selling those intrumentals in reality, I would go to your store right away and buy tons of them. (If they were affordable) :))
Suggestions: It would probably be better if you could shorten your podcast a bit. Some parts with music are not so important which they could be removed. Overall, everything's great.
As I clearly remember, Mr. Michael didn't tell us to comment about the music or anything. Still, I just wanna make sure and give you guys some compliments, I really really like the music, I mean, drums, and guitar, and whatever instruments, I love it! Ya guys totally rock!
Second, I like your podcast, Mary :) The theme image seem is very attractive. Generally, your work is good. It is very lively, you and your group-mates did put many efforts in this, didn't you :p
Content: - You topic is very creative, clear and the script either (I mean the situation). - What you guys said in the commercial improved your purpose very well. - You gave us truthful information, nothing about the fairy is flying around :)). Music is a very hot topic today and you guys have done about music so it's very connect to our modern lives. - Your idea is also very clear too. (Your image shows very clear, and your instruments' sound effects) - During the commercial, you guys have followed the topic very good, kept focus on the topic which is very well and nothing went wrong. - Good using sound effects in the conclusion, emphasized what you tried to introduce and sell. Delivery: - The conversation flows well. There is no dead space between the conversation but i still understand who said what. - I love this part: Voices. Henry's voice has a style of the drum player ;) Sarah's voice need to be stronger. The seller spoke very clearly. Through your voices, I can guess the characters' personalities ;) - Nothing went wrong with grammar. Technical Production: - I don't really like the transition (but the sound effects were good). It messes up a bit but i can still understand - Length: Yours is a little bit long. Overall effectiveness: The part that has music playing only for a while long hears a bit boring (although i understand that you tried to show that your instruments work very well and sound good). Suggestion to improve: You guys have done a very good jobbbb so I just suggest a little thing. The sound that 's near to the end is long. You should cut a part of that. That the transition is a bit messing up so you could use some effects to change the volume, the speech or the pitch to make it easier to hear.
Anyway, your work is very attractive. Can I ask...I wanna buy a electric guitar to play. Do you have it? Ohh.. I should call 911 to get it right? Im gonna call right now but if I have any trouble I will blame you guys. :-w ;) :p
CONTENT:I understood every part of it. I liked the name of the product "Boombox Everywhere". Like ViVI i didn't really like the everywhere. But it was clear and understandable.
DELIVERY: The volume of everyone was the same. I like how henry had so much feeling. Some were lifeless.
MUSIC: The music went well with commercial. With the the drums, guitar, and keyboard. It made the commercial sound interesting and ear-catching.
TECHNICAL PRODUCTIONS: Your commercial sounded very professional because of the content, music, and volume.
Your content was put forth very clearly. It was obvious to see that your product is music instruments. I even like your brand name. It is kind of boom! :) Interesting use of vocabulary, the words used by someone suspiciously named Henry really stunned me, because I don't know a lot of them, I guess I'm not part of the audience. It focuses very well on topic, but the information sometimes repeats itself, making it unnecessary long. This is a busy world, guys. People are not going to listen to things if it is too long. :)
Delivery: It seems like you rehearsed quite well before you actually recorded. There are no mistakes than I can notice during the presentation. Henry's role made me laugh. Some where less level and enthusiasm than others. So I have to copy Mr. Michael's advice: Make all voices equal. Different emotions, but equal.
Music: Lots of different music. The instruments fit with your message. Sounds good. But at times it seems like you are abusing your music. I think somewhere between 1:10 and 1:42. There was nothing I could discern from it except for constant music. Therefore, you probably can still survive without the need of these long music parts that sap the audience's attention span as well. Good music anyway, but you just need to put them in the right place. :))
Technical Production: I believe you handled the technology very well. Your use of effects and music were awesome. I could definitely hear the effects in the video. Such as the speed up, or the echo thing. I like it very much. The volume varies, which is good to me. But like I said before, it is quite long, and it doesn't need to be. :)
Overall, I think you did a great job. Keep up the Audacity. :))
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I just did like everything and then I press post comment, its not working so I all of my comments deleted, let's start again
omg <3 so cool I love it, you told me it wasn't good, true it's not good but it's
FABULOUS
Content: It was really great, the topic was really clear. You guys really focused on the topic and make it clear to listen and get what are you trying to sell. At first, I was like what's Boombox, and then the commercial explain everything. The commercial is not too short or long, its perfect timing, you guys included everything that you needed too. Your audiences are band player, drummer...so the instruments' sound effects were like awesome; it fits perfectly well with your topic and audience. At the end, where you introduce Boombox, you used Echo-ing effect which is really great because it emphasized Boombox and make the clients focus more on what are you selling. Because the clients need to know what are you selling and where do you sell it, so they can buy it.
Delivery: The narrations and the conversations are really smooth and well practiced. The voices work really well together, so it created good transitions. There were no background noises, which were great and make it clearer to listen. The voices were so emotional and expressive, that it so easy to visualize the situations. It was so descriptive that you guys bring me to the situation; I could almost feel like I’m standing there and listen to your conversations. Except for Nick's voice, his voice doesn't show any emotions or expressions, he was speaking like in a straight line, where the tones stay the same, which might make it not interesting. Also, some parts that Sarah said weren’t clear enough, but it’s not really a big deal. Your grammar was great, also, the voices flows really well, which makes it very natural.
Music: The music option was really good; it suits really well with the situations. Like when the guys found the new instruments, you played " It's on”, which shows that they have found the instruments that they needed, so that they're playing awesome right now.
Technical production: As I mentioned the transitions were really great, and the voices' volume was equal, not to loud or low. I’m like how did you guys do that, that's like amazing, everyone have their own voices, and guys are making it work so well together. You guys did an amazing job on this; the commercial is not too long or too short, its perfect timing.
OMG, I just love it so much, it's just so AMAZING, if you guys were really selling Boombox, I will be buying it.
Content: You guys did a very very good jobs. I like this commercial the most. The time was very perfect, 2 minutes and you guys could put all the things that you guys needed, it was just so amazing. The commercial shows who are the audiences and where people can contact if they want to buy Boombox. You guys really focus on the thing that you want to sell.
Delivery: The voices of the actors are really clearly, there were some soft music while the actors were talking, it made the audiences like the thing that you want to sell. The voices were very emotional, the actors show very clear when they angry or they feel satisfy. I like Henry's voice the most because he shows his emotion very clear. The grammar was very good too.
Music: The music you guys chose very good in every situations. After they bought a new instruments, they played very good which makes the audiences feel excited about it.
Technical: The volume was always equal, and it made me feel excited when I listen to the commercial. The time was perfect.
I love yours commercial, it was so good. this is the best commercial that I've ever heard.
your was very good and u really focus on every work u do and u make this comercial more excite to listen to. I like it alot.
everything that Mr.michale taught u, u apply everything to this project. The music was cool it fit in to every situation. IT's rock.
Ur voices was clear and easy to listen to.
Content: I think you guys did a good job. It's a little long, which will make the audince kin of bored, but it's not too long that would drive the audience nuts. Your audience are teenagers and music fan liek you said, was clearly show on your commercial, like when Henry said he had a show on weekend and he need a new drum. Your sound effects were great, that is what I like most about your commercial, you put the echoing sound at the end of the commercial which makes the commercial more interesting.
Delivery: I think your voices sound very clearly, especially Henry and Sarah's voice. Henry voice sound like he use some kind of very good technology, because his voice is the clearest of all. I have nothing to say to your grammar, it's perfect. You did a really great job on expressing feelings, again, Henry did a great job on this, he felt very excited when he saw the new drums, it's very good.
Music: Your background music fits with the situation, like when Henry saw the new drum, the music is excited.
Technical: You guys don't have noisy, dead space, it's good. You guys keep the sound equal, not sometimes very high, sometimes low. You guys did a great job on this.
If I could grade you out of 10 points, I would grade you guys 8.5/10.
I love your project and the way you guys did it was very cool. The sound was awesome and funny running order. But I think you should make it shorter but still keep the special of it stay the same.
- Content: I think it a very creative project which you guys use many hilarious vocabulary words to make it more interesting. Also it includes as much as information for the audience to understand what it is about. When I watched it I understand right away and it is a good thing that the audiences really understand it.
- Delivery: I love the way you guys delivered the idea to the audience by making sound and clear information. Also with a good grammar and easy to listen to, it also helps your project more successful.
- Music Enhancements: About the music I think you guys but them in a good order but the quality of it should be clearer. Somehow when I heard it there was too many different music that make me very confuse and mess up. That is just some suggestion but still yours are awesome.
- Technical Production: The transitions or your music and your voice are really smooth. The volume and the sound effects are balance. As I said it was a little bit long but the sounds are still perfect.
I think yours are already cool and interesting. Yours are one of mine favorite and just a little suggestion as I said keep it shorter but don’t change anything else.
I thought your commercial was more than okay (:
CONTENT
I thought the topic was straght forward and clear. It's about a music instrument store kinda thing. And the audience you're presenting it to is very easy to recognize; teenagers and music fans. Even if you didn't tell me, I would know. The title Boombox Everywhere, umm, the Everywhere makes it sound not as good. So maybe if you thought of another word it would sound better. Otherwize I understood the topic from the beginning and the picture really helped :)
DELIVERY
The way you delivered your lines help make the content clear. It was smooth, and the volume of each person was the same, which made is sound professional. You could've put more emotion into it though. Some people's lines, like Nick's & Sarah's were very plain & vague. It needed to sound lively. I know acting isn't a major part of commercials, but it wouldn't hurt to add a little hollywood into it :)
MUSIC
The music you chose, for example one I recognized; Better Than Revenge, fit the situation well because the audience is for teenagers. Teenagers listen to modern music, and that's what keeps the commercial so lively, the rock music. I like how you chose songs that included a variety of instruments, which widens the range of instruments sold at the shop. That would make the customers want to buy it. But I think there was one song, something soft and sweet wouldn't fit this commercial very well. SO maybe a change in that? (:
TECHNICAL PRODUCTION
The time was a little too long, but if it had a little more life in it then it would be worth it. Stil commercials aren't supposed to be long. I thought the volume was the same the whole way through for the voices, like I said, it made your commercial sound professional.
Overall; I like it (:
Woww, I..what's the word?..LOVE! your commercial *wink wink*
Content: you guys really stayed focus on the topic. I can already tell from the beginning that your group did a lot of editing and also adding sound effects to your audio. Amazing!
Delivery: It has a great delivery of conversational style. You spoke clearly and emotionally. I like that. I also like how Henry talks like a cool dude. Oh, perfect grammar also!
Technical Production: The equal volume of voice enhanced your presentation. But, I think your podcast was a little bit too long for a commercial, but it's very good so far!
Effectiveness: Seriously, if you guys were really selling those intrumentals in reality, I would go to your store right away and buy tons of them. (If they were affordable) :))
Suggestions: It would probably be better if you could shorten your podcast a bit. Some parts with music are not so important which they could be removed. Overall, everything's great.
As I clearly remember, Mr. Michael didn't tell us to comment about the music or anything. Still, I just wanna make sure and give you guys some compliments, I really really like the music, I mean, drums, and guitar, and whatever instruments, I love it! Ya guys totally rock!
First, sorry about my grammar, it's bad :P
Second, I like your podcast, Mary :) The theme image seem is very attractive. Generally, your work is good. It is very lively, you and your group-mates did put many efforts in this, didn't you :p
Content:
- You topic is very creative, clear and the script either (I mean the situation).
- What you guys said in the commercial improved your purpose very well.
- You gave us truthful information, nothing about the fairy is flying around :)). Music is a very hot topic today and you guys have done about music so it's very connect to our modern lives.
- Your idea is also very clear too. (Your image shows very clear, and your instruments' sound effects)
- During the commercial, you guys have followed the topic very good, kept focus on the topic which is very well and nothing went wrong.
- Good using sound effects in the conclusion, emphasized what you tried to introduce and sell.
Delivery:
- The conversation flows well. There is no dead space between the conversation but i still understand who said what.
- I love this part: Voices. Henry's voice has a style of the drum player ;) Sarah's voice need to be stronger. The seller spoke very clearly. Through your voices, I can guess the characters' personalities ;)
- Nothing went wrong with grammar.
Technical Production:
- I don't really like the transition (but the sound effects were good). It messes up a bit but i can still understand
- Length: Yours is a little bit long.
Overall effectiveness: The part that has music playing only for a while long hears a bit boring (although i understand that you tried to show that your instruments work very well and sound good).
Suggestion to improve:
You guys have done a very good jobbbb so I just suggest a little thing. The sound that 's near to the end is long. You should cut a part of that. That the transition is a bit messing up so you could use some effects to change the volume, the speech or the pitch to make it easier to hear.
Anyway, your work is very attractive.
Can I ask...I wanna buy a electric guitar to play. Do you have it? Ohh.. I should call 911 to get it right? Im gonna call right now but if I have any trouble I will blame you guys. :-w ;) :p
Dude that was epic.
CONTENT:I understood every part of it. I liked the name of the product "Boombox Everywhere". Like ViVI i didn't really like the everywhere. But it was clear and understandable.
DELIVERY: The volume of everyone was the same. I like how henry had so much feeling. Some were lifeless.
MUSIC: The music went well with commercial. With the the drums, guitar, and keyboard. It made the commercial sound interesting and ear-catching.
TECHNICAL PRODUCTIONS: Your commercial sounded very professional because of the content, music, and volume.
Love,
Kristine ♥
It's no less than what I expect. Great job :)
Your content was put forth very clearly. It was obvious to see that your product is music instruments. I even like your brand name. It is kind of boom! :) Interesting use of vocabulary, the words used by someone suspiciously named Henry really stunned me, because I don't know a lot of them, I guess I'm not part of the audience. It focuses very well on topic, but the information sometimes repeats itself, making it unnecessary long. This is a busy world, guys. People are not going to listen to things if it is too long. :)
Delivery: It seems like you rehearsed quite well before you actually recorded. There are no mistakes than I can notice during the presentation. Henry's role made me laugh. Some where less level and enthusiasm than others. So I have to copy Mr. Michael's advice: Make all voices equal. Different emotions, but equal.
Music: Lots of different music. The instruments fit with your message. Sounds good. But at times it seems like you are abusing your music. I think somewhere between 1:10 and 1:42. There was nothing I could discern from it except for constant music. Therefore, you probably can still survive without the need of these long music parts that sap the audience's attention span as well. Good music anyway, but you just need to put them in the right place. :))
Technical Production: I believe you handled the technology very well. Your use of effects and music were awesome. I could definitely hear the effects in the video. Such as the speed up, or the echo thing. I like it very much. The volume varies, which is good to me. But like I said before, it is quite long, and it doesn't need to be. :)
Overall, I think you did a great job. Keep up the Audacity. :))
Content: The idea is very good, I think your title is a good and attractive name for a boombox commercial.
Delivery: It was smooth and easy to understand
Technical Production: THe sound effect goes very well with the commercial, it makes the commercial better.
Music: I like your music alot, it is really awesome.
Improvements: Balance the number of people talking more. !!
Delivery: it's smooth, calm and easy to understand.
Improvement: keep up the good work and u can do better than this. :D
Thanks Guys!
I'll try to make it better next time after reading all of your comments which were REALLY & EXTREMELY long! (: ♥
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